Can You Invade;
An Essay on To Kill A Mockingbird
By Cassie Seidel
English Class
10/5/10
Essay #4
You are walking around your house, and you look out the window. You see a few shadows that don't look like the deer that always like to chomp away at your cabbages. No, this was a human shadow. There has been some strange rumors going on about you latly, but you didn't think it would come to this. How would you feel if this happened to you?
(TS)In the book To Kill A Mockingbird, the character Boo Radley is very strange, but he is not strange enough to have a bunch of people invading his privacy. (SD1) Many people believe that Boo Radley is a rambunctious man who doesn’t know his place. (CM1) They laugh at Boo becase he was a lunatic as a child, but he could be a gentleman now. (CM2) The townspeople haven’t even seen Boo for many years now. (SD2) I believe that everyone in the story either ignores the Radley House, or is completly obsessed with it and would like to sneak inside. (CM1) How would you feel if someone snuck into your house? (CM2) I know that it would make me go bonkers. (CS) I feel that no matter who you are, “A persons a person, no matter how small.”(Dr. Seuss)
It's not right to invade a house, no matter how weird you might be. The story that I told in the begining was a summary of what happened in To Kill A Mockingbird to Boo Radley. A few kids wanted to know who he really was, so they snuck into his backyard. Those kids almost got shot by Boo's brother. What would you do to those kids?
Self AssesmentI believe that I might have a few careless mistakes in this essay, and that is a carless mistake I need to work on. I think I used quotes quite well in this essay. Also I need to work on writing my sentances more clearly. I would give myself a B- on this essay.
Dear Cassie
ReplyDeleteI think that you are a talented writer and I like your Horton Hears a Who quote. However, I think that your sentences are a little sparse. They would sound even better if you added a few details. Also, you seem to have rushed a little as in your 2nd SD you forgot to make some words plural. I like your writing though and think that you know how to word a sentence well. Good job. Cheers!
Cassie-
ReplyDeleteI agree with Jenn in saying you are a very talented writer, but, still agreeing with Jenn, you might have made a few errors. First off, your first chunk seems to be a bit off topic which, with this topic, is understandable. Also, in SD2 you didn't make some of the words plural.
You did a very good job on this beside a few things. Good luck finishing it!
Dear Cassie,
ReplyDeleteYour introduction made me interesting about what you wrote. Although, it seems like you need some examples, which is specific. Why Boo Radley is strange, what did he do?
I have a question for Jenn and Alexander, I think the word "everyone" is not used as a plural, so she could use "is" for "everyone."
In my opinion, you did very great job on this essay, but add some more examples.
See you!
*interested
ReplyDeleteThanks Everyone!
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