Fallen Tears;

an Essay on Crying based on To Kill A Mockingbird

Pine Point School

Cassie Seidel

Essay #5

10/12/10

           My face starts to get red, my hands get all shaky, and then I let the first tear fall. I can feel it running down my face, like pressing all the buttons on the elevator. It stops at many places, but eventually finds its way to the ground floor. That's how I think Jem's tears started.

           (TS)I feel that Jem was crying because he was scared. (SD1) How would you feel if an adult told you a lie.(CM1) Would you feel discouraged, or would you want to "Climb into Jem's skin." and find out his secrets(CM2) Jem's story is entirely different because its not just any person that lied to him, it was Nathan Radley. (SD2) Nathan Radley can strike fear into the hearts of many people, especially Jem, yet Jem can be brave. (CM1) He thinks that if you go into the Radley place "[his] funeral would have been held the next afternoon." CM2 Jem had been the only one brave enough to sneak into the Radley House, and right after Jem snuck in, they found a knothole full of treasures. (CM3) Then one day, while walking down the lonely street, Jem found the knothole filled with cement, and when he asked Nathan about it, he said it was dying.(CM4)Unfortunately when he asked his father, Atticus, he said the tree was perfectly healthy. (CS)"When Jem came from the porch, Scout could tell he was crying."(To Kill A Mockingbird)

          (TS) Do you feel like you need to cry right now? (SD1) I feel that everyone needs to cry once in their lifetime to let out their emotions. (CM1) If someone punches you and you cry, that shows pain, or if a family member just died, you would feel like sitting and crying. This shows hurt on the inside. (CM2) The tears show that you can show your emotions without hiding them inside and feeling terrible insecure. (SD2) I admit that I have not wanted to cry before. (CM1) I had just learned that my great-aunt Ruth had died. She was 94. (CM2) I could taste the salt on my lips before a single tear fell. (CS) If you need to, just let out a tear.

             After the first tear, the fountain starts to flow. Many different elevators trying to find their way. An ocean of emotions. I just let them flow, and those specific tears, never come back. I am thankful that we laugh more than we cry, and we love more than we kill. A fallen tear, is just the beginning.

Self Assessment

           I feel that I need to work on misspelling things, because they are stupid mistakes. Also, I think I did a really good job at metaphors in this essay. Also, one of my problems in this essay is finding the right way to use my participles. I would give myself a B+ for this essay.